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2 Re: Kiberos on Tue May 24, 2016 5:51 am

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I guesssssa approooved

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3 Re: Kiberos on Tue May 24, 2016 8:17 am

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Char unapproved. Reason.

Char needs more detail. History doesn't add up much either. Doesn't really look like a history. Keep it smooth. Declined 4 now

Flesh out personality more as well.

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5 Re: Kiberos on Tue May 24, 2016 8:37 am

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Your first half of history barely details the chars existence. Most of it is just associating her with your previous character.

Personality needs to be explained beyond "I'm a hunter and I don't feel things" I doubt one person has only existed to just hunt. Your history for the most part doesn't detail her beyond "my characters convenient cousin" the first few paragraphs don't at all explain her story or any events prior to her arriving to the blues. The only part we are left with is "she was transported at birth". Explain this better.

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7 Re: Kiberos on Tue May 24, 2016 8:52 am

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Here's the full rule

You either detail the char right.

Or your shits rejected.

Characters are meant to he detailed and explained. You either edit the fucking app and stop whining about it or its rejected

The entire point is for things to make sense. It wouldn't be needed on your app if we didn't care how it was written .

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9 Re: Kiberos on Tue May 24, 2016 9:24 am

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Char didn't really change beyond words added.

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11 Re: Kiberos on Tue May 24, 2016 9:56 am

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Real Steele wrote:You ask me to add words her personality isn't going to change or history just added bit a word. Dont see what you asking

Listen just meeting the word count is not acceptable. The whole point of the history and personalities are both to give a in depth look to your character. It's fine if you plan on developing your character through IC events, however that does not mean you can half ass a character application and expect it to be approved. If my knowledge serves me correct you've been rping for awhile, so something of this quality will not be accepted.

Add more depth to your personality because you're repeating the same thing, but using different words. The history is meant to be a story of how your character got to where they currently are. How it is now our history does little to highlight this. Also make it a little harder to understand; you're grammar is bad to the point were you are even using the right words or the right tense of a word. Your character isn't denied because honestly that is the day way out, because even if you make another character I feel like these problems will arise again. So you only have two options here. Fix your character or be stuck in "limbo". I don't know you personally so I don't know if this was just something you rushed or whatever, but again I expect more from someone who had been rping over a year.

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13 Re: Kiberos on Tue May 24, 2016 1:08 pm

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Did you just copy and paste a personality from the wikia? And did you think we are too stupid to notice? You must've or else you wouldn't have attempted to blatantly copy and paste Hisoka's personality to use for yourself - word for word.

Since you are incapable of making your own character, this one has been denied. No ifs, buts, or peanut butter hair cuts.

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14 Re: Kiberos on Tue Jun 28, 2016 7:57 pm

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I approve this application. I know a real nigga when I see one epps


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